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Jean Paul RiopelleJean Paul Riopelle is located at St. Antoine and Placè Jean Paul Riopelle. This place is well defined by the buildings around it on three sides. The fourth side of the placè is left open and not as well defined by a buildings façade. The space uses trees to give it a covered, enclosed feeling rather than the open feeling you get from Square Victoria. Jean Paul Riopelle has no definite axis. The path weaves in and out of the seating and there is really no definite flow of movement. Even though there are a lot of unpaved areas, the paving allows you to move throughout all of it as if you would use this space to roam in no particular method or direction. At one end of the placè there is an open area with a fountain in the center.
Square Victoria
Square Victoria is located right down the street from Jean Paul Riopelle at St. Antoine and Rue du Square Victoria. Unlike Jean Paul Riopelle, Square Victoria is not well defined by buildings and as a result is defined by the surrounding streets. Square Victoria has a definite axis that extends throughout the placè. The seating follows the axis of the placè as well as the few fountains in the middle. The path has a definite flow of movement and restricts you from straying from that flow by lining the path with seats on one side and fountains on the other. This placè is bisected by a street and continues its linear axis on the other side.
Both of these places have a rectangular shape defined by either the streets or buildings surrounding them. While one seems to have a very linear direct path for movement, Square Victoria has a more free roaming area that is not as restricted.
posted by vanschlingerlandt at
12:01 AM
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Overall, your analysis has all the elements necessary to make it work. You are looking at the right things and you are also reading them correctly. However, your analysis reads as a set of separate observations, not a direct comparison. Take this further.
Here are a few suggestions that may help you improve the overall format and content of the text.
1. By locating the images near each other you are setting up the format for comparison. You must also select the views carefully as they are part of your argument and so they must illustrate the components of the places you are using in your analysis.
2.Describe each location. This initial description must be short and simply introduce both places so that the reader can understand type/size and localize the places.
3.Select a series of elements you wish to include in your analysis and use this opportunity to introduce your thesis statement. The statement is your personal position regarding the argument (take a stand). You have already started doing it, use it and make it work.
4.Clearly compare (via similarities and/or differences) and contrast the elements, one on one. Discuss each issue using BOTH places as supporting or contradicting components.
5. Finally, add a separate paragraph (not too long) for the conclusion. It is the synopsis in which you reiterate your overall position on the argument.
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